Sunday, March 15, 2015

100 Word Challenge Week 26

"Listen Ben we need to get past the guards in order to get into Buckingham Palace," exclaimed Ben's dad Ted.
"Okay what do we have to do?"
5 minutes later…
Ted and Ben were inside, they crept around the hallways and as they turned the corner they saw the Queen.  They quickly hurried back around the corner to see six guards coming their way.  Unfortunately Ben and Ted got caught and were sent to the big house.  Ben and Ted both now had criminal records and spent 25 years in prison. 
“All that and we didn’t even get to take a selfie with the Queen!”

11 comments:

  1. Adarsh and omar from LondonMarch 17, 2015 at 4:04 AM

    Nice story Jerrad

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  2. Jerrad I like your
    fancy work you need more paragraphs

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  3. Imaad and Mohamed:
    it is very amazing good work I want to see more good work
    By Mohamed

    good paragraphs I really love your cool work By imaad Lol

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  4. Ayla and Asra from London

    funny ending! I like the story. Maybe you could do paragraphs next. What comes next in the story? Lovely use of vocabulary and speech marks.

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  5. awesome story and what will happen next?

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  6. Amazing work Jerrad good work it is like the best story in the world. Have a good time

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  7. I liked it when you wrote 'all that we didn't even get to get to take a selfie with the queen!' You should use paragraphs in you sentences to make it better.
    It was a good story:].

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  8. I liked your story because you didn't have punctuation errors and you added humor to the end of your story! -Ashley Kim

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  9. This is a really good story, I love the way you put the words, good use of descriptive writing.

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  10. i liked the way you wanted a selfie with the queen:)

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