I woke up from my nap and then the room went black.
I adjusted my eyes, nothing happened. I still couldn't see. I
tried to get up, still nothing. Then I heard a loud noise and a peculiar
smell filled my nostrils. I started to scream but no sound came out.
There was that loud sound again. My heart was racing and I started
to panic. Suddenly I was able to see
again and move again and talk again, I felt great. Then I realized my dad had been sitting on my
head the whole time and the sounds must have been farts. I was extremely livid!
Well done, Jerrad, both tense initially then ending with surprising humour!
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Nice work my class loved that the loud sound was just a fart. Good work making it to the showcase. We all loved your work.
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